The K-Files by bricks

 

So far scenarios have tried to show us what would happen if Kiyoshi got the remote (Kiyoshi's Gaiden) and what if Katrina would have gotten the remote (Greener Grasses), it was fair that Kyoko's turn to have the baton now.

Once Kyoko gets the remote and shows it to her friends, Kiyoshi recommends using it to solve mysteries and the scenario turns into a Scooby-Doo episode. Basically, Michelle asks about a weird thing that happened to her in the storeroom of the school, so Kiyoshi and Kyoko go and start to find out, Katrina and Claus later join in the fun.

Overall I thought the story was okay, I was thinking they would use the memory copy function to solve a mystery but in the end, the remote isn't used this way, there isn't too much comedy and the scenario gives a bigger Slice-of-Life vibe. Kiyoshi gets gender-bent, some small, some cute mind control follows, and the case ends up solved in a wacky and nonsensical way (it seems you can't mind control ghosts but you can exorcise them wiping away their memories) and after some funny but fake advancements for future episodes, the scenario ends.

The scenario is overall complete, with around 40 minutes of gameplay. While the story isn't really TF-focused, it might be disappointing for some, I find it non-essential in the very end but I can say that you can still give it a shot if you want some cute, inoffensive fun. It's not great, but it's good.

Into the Janeverse by Clavietika the Gynaecoid

 

When I entered the Student Transfer Discord I did read comments about how easy can be to make a scenario due to the low technological barrier, and with all my might, I decided to give it a go, starting to work on it.

Now, this scenario is composed of two finished routes, each one with a different feel, there were more routes planned but right now I am focusing on another scenario and this one probably will not be continued, at last not any time soon.

Yes, this name is also super stupid, I was planning on doing an anthology of different Jane background stories to show in each different route a way to develop Jane differently, each one ending up in a different Jane, henceforth the title Janeverse, but eh, I think it is just too silly and actually misleading, I actually had a massive twinning route, but there is just so much more interesting ideas in my to do list that I doubt I will ever end up doing that one, time is limited.

The first one I did was the Kiyoshi route, not in the scenario itself but it was also the first public story I have done ever, and it shows. My objective was simple, I wanted to make Kiyoshi likable. The truth is that I have always identified with Kiyoshi due to his nature, he is quirky, he misses obvious social clues, and he is seen as a joke by everybody else; my experience in school was pretty similar to his, I wanted to take the challenge, and show that Kiyoshi could really have humanity and not be just a joke character like he has been treated until this date.

Now, what do I think of it now? Is it recommendable? Did achieve its purpose?

Personally, I hate it, I really really hate it. It is just a subpar, average at best romance story that doesn't stand up with any other story in TF fiction, it is just one of them, nothing new, nothing impressive, just me trying to follow the book and do it right. While I think I showed traces of what it can be done to make Kiyoshi grow as a character and show that he can be a good couple if you are into quirky and nerdy guys (which I am), the story has very low stakes and its tone is too cheesy to the point it makes me want to puke, Jane is also pretty one-note being just "girly" and  "sentimental", something I dislike now. I also shoehorned some lines about mental illnesses like Kiyoshi having depression to explain his inability to take things seriously, instead of just attributing it to him being immature. I feel I went way too far from what Kiyoshi really is, I projected too much into him and I ruined it. Overall, this route makes me feel ashamed.

If you still want to see a slice-of-life and romance story with Jane as the protagonist and see a more human rendition of Kiyoshi, you are free to check it out, taking into account the wholesome tone and all the cheese you will have to bear.

The second route had a different result, it's based on a Yui clone, Yuuni. This character comes from Applemelon's scenario, the story got abandoned but in a draft Gary sent me I did read how Applemelon basically launched the clone into space killing her in the process because Jane (in a Jekyll and Mrs. Hyde fashion) didn't know how to unsummon her and wanted to get rid of her, that caused me a huge pity for her and awoke a lot of feelings in me that literally forced me to make this story, I just couldn't think in anything else, I had to write her story.

Basically, I was kinda obsessed with the idea (or well, I still am) of being the mother to someone like you, basically, of someone having an unconditional respect for you, of being able to do anything to anybody but intead choose them to treat them kindly; basically, I'm obsessed in the idea of kind, gentle omnipotence over a single someone.

But it is not just the Jane part of the story I like, it's the Yuuni part too, the Yui clone: We have somebody who has been made from nothing and doesn't have anywhere to go due to her origins, somebody who is not just a copy but a true being who lives and exists just like any other person and knows somebody that could erase her any moment, but doesn't. It's this sensation of pure and unconditional kindness of a merciful god that makes me feel safe too, and Yuuni after all this tremendous fear she is received with kindness and is accepted by Jane, total and complete acceptation set up to its extreme logical conclusion: a witch mother that is always with you. 

There is also the fact that Yuuni and Jane are also the same age so in the eyes of everybody they are seen as equal and even if Jane is more powerful than Yuuni, Yuuni is able to live by herself and doesn't really need to hear any advice or learn about life from Jane. I have always been afraid of taking responsibility for someone because I can't trust in my own decisions, so by extension Jane doesn't raise Yuuni or anything. Yuuni will still obey Jane if Jane wants to, but Jane gives that permission to Yuuna to be more than herself, to be more mature than her, or well, something like that, I don't know, I'm not a fucking psychologist and this is not even the main conflict the route has, yes, I'm sorry to admit but all this is just a bunch of emotional masturbation, yes, it makes me angry, but that's how things are!

In the end, after I showed all these cute scenes of Jane being powerful and Yuuni weak I ran out of conflict, I panicked and I sat one night to brainstorm. In the end, I found that Yuuni could get a new crisis doubting about her own free will due to her own nature as a clone, and it worked naturally well, it was also fun to twesk the relationship between Yuuni and Jane as much as I could, taking it up to its limits, overall while is a bit boring route I find this concept to be solid. I like it.

The route has a lot of issues, yes, first a lot of scenes were pretty repetitive, as Gary said: "Characters barely show any emotions, especially Jane, Yui and Yuuni, their speeches are very monotonous, they are always calm, they always say the right words and I don't see anything interesting in their characters. They are literally the same." In the end, I ended up making Yui the villain, making her regret creating Yuuni and threaten her with exorcising her, increasing her anger and creating a bigger outburst between Yuuni and Jane. The pacing isn't as great considering there is only one arc and is still cheesy, but since Natalie already reviewed it and she liked it, this route is done for me, I don't want to change anything else and mess up what I did right, I'm happy with how it is now, and I'm also thinking in bringing the concept back in future stories, but with better execution and set up.

Several people like it, which makes me happy, there are some strong emotions I was able to show and people connected with, so, if you like super wholesome cheesy stories, I can recommend this one with all things considered, it is not great, but I think it's at least good for that kind of niche audience I am aiming for, it has some ideas I still think are interesting and worth exploring. It is a cute route and some parts of it still give me the stomach butterflies.

What do I think the scenario overall? Eh, it's eh; at best, it's just a mixed bag, it is my first effort after all and I still got at a lot of help for it while making it, if you have already checked other wholesome GB scenarios and you are still hungry for them, like really hungry and desperate to the point that you would check anything no matter how low, you can still check this one if you can forgive all its flaws, although I would still recommend checking better ones first if you haven't already.

Additional Info:

-Kiyoshi Route

I took the project out in an impulse, I obviously had never done anything like writing before and I wanted to finish it as soon as possible fearing that my energy to do it would run out pretty quickly, that I would abandon the project because I usually lack the will to do anything due to my depression, I wanted to get me name in the community.

What did I do then? I took an already done, abandoned scenario: Yui Spellbook Continuation, made by his majesty Applemelon, and I started editing it to my taste so I could create my own story as fast as I could, running against the clock and my own abulia.

Since I didn't have the energy to read any instructions either I just took the code, watched the tutorial videos of, again, his majesty Applemelon, and I started editing the code little by little, in the first scenes I changed just some dialogues, then I changed some backgrounds and I played with animations, as I edited his already done scenario I learned more and more, I also made a lot of obvious questions in the Discord because I haven't read the guide and I wanted to finish fast, around the end I learned to make new scenes, use positions, and the basic things for finish a scenario.

The writing of this first route of mine took a lot of rewrites and editing, thankfully, two people came to me saying they wanted to contribute to the project and I happily accepted the. My first idea for the ending was to end up the story in the sex scene with Jane with Kiyoshi inspired by one of the endings of X-Change Alternative. I said it would be best if I could give something of fetishistic appeal to the audience after the whole drama thing, I was afraid people would hate it. Fortunately, Erin and Gary told me that ending up te route in a sexual note was bad, and they said I should end up with a more serious ending instead, which gave me hope t make more drama stories. I also proposed an ending where Jane and Kiyoshi would end up being taken away by a spaceship to end up being abducted by a spaceship to imply that all the content of the route wasn't serious at all, just a joke, again, because I was afraid, that ending also got rejected by my peers.

I asked a lot Erin, Gary, and Ayathegame about how I should end the story because I wasn't confident in my ideas, I was scared and I just wanted to make things right, after I ended up changing Applemelon's scenario and I added the ideas I had ready I found out I didn't know what I was going to write next, I had no idea in how to end the story, so the rest of the plot was made by making up questions to these three people and even more "Do you think this would work?" "No?" "Do you think this would?" "Can you recommend me anything?" "Maybe if I do this instead would be better?" I feel bad for them because of my lack to think by myself, but I was able to finish thanks to them. 

A lot of the early versions of the scenario have very cringeworthy ideas I was trying to fit in, like having Kiyoshi breakdown saying he was aware of how stupid he was and how he wanted to make things right, which was changed to Kiyoshi's breaking down because he made Jane angry which Gary and Aya said worked better. In another version, Kiyoshi saves Jane from Carrie and she forgives him for visiting him in the hospital, but I erased it because I found it cheap and it almost made me puke later. 

The dissociation was also an issue, because st some point Jane described John as s totally different person and IK12345 mentioned that this could be seen as if Jane was born by the spell instead and that she had killed John, a different being than her. Personally I wanted to keep it ambiguous so people could think I was focusing in an fetish ID story if they wanted, again, because I was scared, but at the end so followed her advise and I took a lot of the extreme dissociation of the story, although some people still find it confusing, which was a failure in my part. A failure caused by my own indecision and fear in what to write.

In one of the versions, I made John get abducted by aliens and make him female-minded to avoid any issues about having a non-cis John because I was scared with the complaints about changing the main character of the game. Luckysquid and Kawaiiswitcher said that adding aliens and then go to magic damaged the pacing of the scenario, so in the end, I removed all that and went for a simple non-cis John, it was not my favorite option, but it was something they were right about, my pacing was already irregular enough.

The first sex scene draft had descriptions about reaching extasis and uniting with the cosmos because since it was going to be the final scene, I wanted it to be dramatic, Erin said it was very cringing pointing out Kiyoshi would not become a total porno star in his first time (fair point, what was I thinking?) and thankfully helped me change it, I ended up copying some lines of the Murder route sex scene and I tried to add some of the mine making sure and triple checking with Erin that they weren't cringe (Does this work? Does this sound natural? Would this describe this well?), Erin also gave a couple of sentences which I added for the final product. Lesson learned. I will never do a sex scene, ever again, not until I can experience it myself.

After working practically all day every day I was able to finish the route in 20 days, I published it, and overall it got average reviews.

-Yuuni Route

I think I don't have too much to say about the process creation of this process, this time it took me around a month and after a lot of questions and game testing thanks to a friend of mine in discord, Keyboard, and proofreading by Kawaiswitcher, I was able to finish an acceptable version.

There were also some cringe ideas from my parts, like calling Yuuni "Yuitwo" at first, I changed it after Hizack and Ayathegame recommended me this other name, hoping nobody would remember the old name again. I even had some technical issues like when trying to loop a track in one of the dramatic parts of the route, I wasn't able to make it crossfade well, so I exported a big chunk of it at a pretty low bitrate and pasted it there, the song is a minimal piano piece with repetitive notes that lasts like 30 minutes and I left 10 minutes of it, which the first 4 have a very slow fade in to make the music grow up more and more. Ridiculous, I know, I just hope nobody has noticed yet, I hope not to do such a thing ever again. The whole code and assets are a mess, it makes me feel dirty looking at them.

Yui's Intervention by Alternate

 

A Pre-Monitor scenario showing what would happen if John had tried to use the remote with Yui on the third day of the canon. In this scenario, John either tries to get the remote back from her by force to end up swapping with her, or John showing the remote to Yui like in Monitor but this time with Kiyoshi.

If you try to snatch the remote from Yui the scenario goes into body swap either both trying to find a way to swap back and hoping the remote is not totally broken or either wait to figure something out, even then, it ends just as it starts.

If you explain to Yui about the remote, she will swap John's sex for a moment telling him that since he prefers to be a guy, he should experience how to be a girl for a moment all before Kiyoshi tells her that she should experience changing sex as well if she is going to do so with John, Yui enters in reason and the player is given the option to invite Yui to go with John's friends.

The feeling of the scenario is relatively similar to the main game, a bit slice-of-life-ish and not too dark, it could have been an enjoyable scenario and maybe it was going to play similarly as in Monitor with John getting along more with Yui. The scenario gives the player a lot of options to try with but all of them end with Path Under Construction. Path Under Construction, Path Under Construction, Path Under Construction...

There are just so many scenarios that want to start something and create a setup for a story but simply just end as they start, path under construction, I just feel like a soul lost in a limbo of unfinished stores and I don't know what to do anymore.

Kwumpus Hunt by MechMage

 

Fan cover made by Clavietika

Absurd, surreal, and goofy. Based on a text adventure game from the 70s, Kwumpus Hunt offers a fantastic comedy wrapped up in puzzle-like gameplay that any Student Transfer fan should check at least once if they want to try out something different and refreshing.

The plot centers around Mel and her quest for the Kwumpus, an evil entity that has taken over the school changing everything and everybody to his liking. With the help of her friend and guide Flavia, Mel will have to find out what is happening and strike in the right moment to free the school of its perdition.

The gameplay is nonlinear and even randomized. Now, before you flip up about randomizer use, I have to say that this is randomizer use done right. There are several characters that appear in different rooms every time, the location of the villain is also randomized so you will never know where to actually attack. The rooms without characters offer to the player the possibility to watch pieces of the past to collect clues about the evil Kwumpus to make sense out of the situation.

The rooms with characters will not let you get any clues from that room, so, to get all clues, you will need to replay the scenario several times; even then, the scenario lets you get the right ending with a single playthrough. Replaying the game is very enjoyable anyway thanks to the 7 different endings you can get in total (9 countings some small variations according to Mech, but I didn't see them anywhere, to be honest).

Each room gives you a limited selection of other rooms to go to, if you find end up walking to a room with the wrong character, you will get a bad ending; you have to learn how to go through the right combination of rooms to navigate through the school without being found by the villain or one of the mind-controlled people before time. 

One thing I found a bit annoying is that the rooms do not follow a certain pattern, naturally. Being in the stairway doesn't give you the option to go to the roof, and being on the gate doesn't necessarily let you go to the courtyard, you have to go through several rooms until you find one that lets you access the room you are looking for. While some people might find this a small inconvenience that could increase gameplay without adding any actual content, I found it to be just a small nitpick in the otherwise interesting random mechanics of the game. Because yes, that's right, this is not just a visual novel, this is an actual puzzle game where you have to press the right buttons at the right time.

A lot of the TF events like gender-bending, possession, and twinning are used either just in small amounts or are relegated for comedic gags, so overall I would classify this as a Mind Control focused scenario since it is after all the main threat destroying the school.

While I would not recommend it to people who want a thought through serious TF narrative or to lewd and sex-oriented TF fans, I think Kwumpus Hunt is a great choice for anybody who is looking for come comedy-oriented TF content. It is not just very interactive but also very funny and one of its kind.

A Preview of Version 3 by usa2z

 

The preview of Student Transfer v3 is sublime,¿and ineffable, it starts in the branch connecting to Popular Possession, but this time John and Kiyoshi go and possess popular guys instead of girls.

It ends up with Kiyoshi's acceptance of his real identity and getting closer to John in ways both didn't know before, incredibly beautiful.

(Spoiler: In summary, this was a short April Fools joke).

Body Switchers by mbrad

 

While Body Switchers' style will be disappointing for those who look TF for the psychological drama attached to it, people who like the physical part of the swaps would have enjoyed these frenzies where characters focus all the time in the bodies each time they enter to.

In this story, John and Kiyoshi are given the power to switch bodies by will, which they do start with their two best friends, afterward, they start swapping with the bodies of every person they see at school for one reason or another, swapping Brad and Zoey to give Brad a lesson, swap with Tori and Vanessa to give them a lesson, swap Sayaka with Cornelia to give her a lesson, swap Mina with Eric for an experiment, or swap with Kiyoshi and John's mom out of pure lust and curiosity.

Aside from the loose notion characters have from their canon personalities, all of them are left to their barebones acting mostly by the gender stereotype they are part on, characters usually have the same cadence and overall they all point out the basic gender roles every time they get swapped, boys are stronger, bigger, girls are more attractive and weak, this could have gotten repetitive for some but the people who do not want to look too deep into the logic of the situation to get a quickie done would have enjoyed it without issues, and in the way the scenario is written, they could have gotten a quickie one after the other.

The swaps come and go rapidly, showing a similar approach to scenarios like John's Sudden Lifechange but with relatively better results and a relatively more logical plotline, the logic doesn't work the same as in real life, but it is comparable to TV sitcom logic.

What we start to see here is a certain division on the Student Transfer audience, people who are into TF for the psychological, nonsexual aspects of it, and people who like the sexual and physical aspects of it; in that sense, Body Switchers pointed to the latter group a lot more, logic is a secondary aspect of the plot since the characters are there only to acknowledge the body differences they perceive with each swap, overall, the scenario didn't look to take itself too seriously, and what has proposed it was fun if you were part of the demographic is targeted. 

This scenario would have been recommended, but because John and Kiyoshi are tagged as underage people at the end of one of the routes, and as well the existence of one Natsumi scene, this scenario had to be removed for violating TFGS rules due to depicting kids in sexual situations. People who want to read something of this same style can still check its reboot available with the name of The Gift of Switching for Student Transfer v4.

Gold Troubles by Xablerot

 

Described as a teaser to practice with RenPy at its time of publication, Gold Troubles gives us a scene where John shows the remote device to Brad, getting it stolen by Kiyoshi after he accidentally crashes into him.

The remote gender swaps Brad when it falls, and John and Brad have to retrieve it from Kiyoshi who has taken it and escaped to examine it. The dialogues and interactions have not been worked completely, but the idea of having to retrieve a powerful device does sound actually quite fun.

The scenario lasts 5 minutes and has not been updated ever since.

Tales of John the Wizard by IoloNight (PaintedNecroz)

 

The issues that a lot of scenarios experience are the lack of editing and rushed pacing, scenario authors end up writing things rapidly without giving themselves space for proofreading or animation testing and this can end up in static animations without transitions that can make a scenario feel unnatural and even create recurrent reading issues like lack of periods (even beyond the grammar limits that can still happen to writers with English as a secondary language like us).

Unfortunately, Tales of John the Wizard is one of those scenarios, and its amount of ideas doesn't actually compensate for the lack of editing either way.

After a fun self-conscious introduction from John and Sandra, the story starts with John discovering his powers and trying to decide who is the best person he can talk about it, the player is given to chose between 3 options, visiting either Brad, Katrina, or Kiyoshi.

The Katrina route ends up in John morphing himself into his girl version to prove to her about the existence of magic, after some teasing from Katrina, the route ends in a placeholder.

With Brad, John decides not to morph himself because he doesn't feel comfortable as a girl (even when he did change himself in the Katrina route without issues), and Brad volunteers to be the subject of the spell instead. Apparently Zoey comes in and reveals she was listening them all along, after seeing Brad as her little sister, she takes him to try her clothes upstairs.

This is a fun idea I haven't seen explored in other scenarios yet, Zoey seeing Brad becoming a small girl like her, and even taking the initiative instead of obeying him in anything he says since he is "the big bro", PaintedNecroz also has a fun take on Zoey, who thinks John used magic on Kiyoshi to make him go away every time she approaches him.

All of these things would have made for a fun route, but this route also ends right there on a placeholder.

The last route is the most interesting of the three, after meeting up with Kiyoshi in his house to reveal him he has magic, Kiyoshi tells him he has something to reveal as well; while some people might think Kiyoshi has gotten the remote, what actually Kiyoshi got was the company of an alien bunny girl that was exiled from the moon and has to stay with Kiyoshi from now on, making both of them require the help of John's magic abilities.

The scenario ends up there in all three routes without any actual development from them. PaintedNecroz mentioned making the 21-minute scenario in no less than 1 hour and a half counting reading the guide and so forth, and it hasn't been updated ever since.

While even short scenarios are still recommended due to the small ideas they propose, there are no ideas that actually stand out aside from the Kiyoshi route, making the scenario in general completely skippable for any readers in most of the cases.

Spitting Image by Bricks

 

Fan cover made by Clavietika

While it's true that a big part of the TF community is focused on the sexual parts of the transformations alone, there are also people who like the social parts that come from it.

Like v3 and v4's Antics route, v4's Monitor, or v5's Magic Sayaka, Spitting Image focuses on interactions around the school including John's classmates and friends as part of the magic casting rather than merely on having two main leads subject of a TF event. The writing has a very similar tone to one of these routes, just a couple of students playing around with magic, for better or worse.

The story centers on an alternative path to Antics where John decides to tells his friends about the book, John decides to use the morph spell to prove them magic is real, and out of pure mischievousness, the friends pick up Sayaka, later in Kiyoshi's house they take a photo with John (looking as Sayaka) being around with Kiyoshi and they spread it around the school.

Unfortunately, it seems Maria sees John's transformation the day before and records a video that uses to blackmail John, fearing for his life due to witch hunters if the video gets released, John accepts and morphs into Yui so Maria can take compromising photos of her to blackmail Claus and allow her to publish any kind of news articles she wants.

John arrives to Kiyoshi's house and tells his friends, who propose him to morph into Maria to get fingerprint access to her phone and delete any copies that might exist of those pictures.

The story promised a strong and interesting conflict with relatively high stakes (that go up to the roof in a parody "upcoming trailer" at the end of the scenario where John tells Kiyoshi that wants to destroy Tina Koya) in a slice of life kind of setting, but it seems the scenario has been abandoned and touched since.

Aside from capturing pretty relatively well the style and mood of certain ST routes, this scenario also counts with interesting features, like John not being able to use the mind control spell since it is a spell from another "school of magic" and requiring practice from John before he can use them. This is an interesting limitation that can avoid escalation issues that are sometimes presented in the main game where characters have the opportunity to use mind control but they don't think about doing so or simply don't do it "by principle".

The story presents several choices to pick from but these do not trigger any special flairs or routes and show different events going back to the main, linear story of the scenario. While some people might not like having choices that do not affect the plot people who like to have able to see different character's actions will find this a nice detail. Some people might complain about the linear story stelling as well instead of the usual ramification in visual novels but the truth is that the scenario was left up too early to get any more branches or endings.

Even when left alone in a premature state and clocking only at 36 minutes of reading Spitting Image is a fun little ride that fans of these routes can enjoy and get inspired from, personally, I think I enjoy it a bit more than Antics.

Kiyoshi Gaiden by Pegasus

Despite the infamous reputation the character of Kiyoshi has in the canon game and even more thanks to the scenario Harem, a lot of people have gotten away of Kiyoshi-related stories, but one of the first published scenarios actually depicts a very fun take on the character and his surroundings.

In this scenario, Kiyoshi is abducted by aliens instead of John, and around 1 ending and three placeholders are given in 15 minutes of playtime.

Some people might expect a dream-ish hell hole like in Harem since Kiyoshi is the character that seems is the one that is most expected to abuse the power of the remote like Harem did, and he does in one of the routes, but at the difference of the previous scenario, the author actually acknowledges Kiyoshi's mischievousness and shows empathy for the students that are going to be mind-controlled by him and in an actually funny way. The story ends there on a placeholder, but for what it seems like, it seems that the author planned in Kiyoshi actually learn from his action, but nothing can be said aside from that.

The other routes are less impressive, Kiyoshi becoming Zoey, breaking the remote, and meeting Brad, which seemed to point into ID or PD but it ends too soon as well.

In the other one, Kiyoshi tells John about the remote and they use the possession function of the remote (explained in a conveniently and clever sci-fi way) and also ends soon in a placeholder.

Although the scenario doesn't contain enough content to be considered a story on its own, it offers a lot of great jokes, even some at Kiyoshi himself. In the only ending, the scenario has now he decides to not accept the remote and asks the alien bunny girl to have sex with her instead of proposing interspecies intercourse since the alien can't get data now with Kiyoshi experimenting with the remote, she decides to examine him through his rectal cavity instead.

In general, this scenario is everything that Harem should have been, it has a more human depiction of Kiyoshi showing that a funny story can actually be made around him possessing the remote, and overall offers a good, short blueprint for any people interested in writing a story with him as a protagonist.

Harem by AmneLeGrand3

 

In the story of the Student Transfer community, Harem has become one of the most well-known scenarios although the reasons why are rather unfortunate, and Harem has become for a lot of people to what not to do with a scenario.

The story follows Kiyoshi in a rampage of actions that in the end do not make too much sense and confuse the reader. The scenario is written as if no second thoughts were given about each plot element, the concept is so primitive that most people will be able to identify with it due to its dream-like logic throughout the whole story.

What makes Harem bad for a lot of readers is how things are developed, Kiyoshi ends up mind controlling every person he encounters without giving anybody the opportunity to react so he can create his own "Harem" dream, including his relatives like his Sister and Mom. No empathy is given to anybody without any feelings of remorse or thoughtfulness to the people who are mind-controlled. For those fans of TF that like to explore the psychological and social aspects of TF, this makes the scenario null in worth since it does not do any work to explore any of these aspects and goes straight into some sort of wish-fulfillment fantasy that end ups being boring for most people since everything ends up being "perfect" for the protagonist, and asks more suspension of disbelief that any story is allowed to ask for.

The protagonist does not suffer any consequences (in almost all of the routes), nobody can't react to his new powers for too long, since everybody ends up being mind-controlled, the protagonist is happy, the people are happy, but underneath we have a psychopathic-like character that has no limits and a cast disposed of their own identity and opinions, giving the scene a very dark and "macabre" feeling.

The sexual scenes are mostly lackluster as well since they consist mostly of the time in repetitive blowjobs with not too much describing of the situation. Even then, the scenario has gained a certain cult following due to its ironic appeal, the scenario is so erratic that can it even be considered funny for some, it is absurd and surreal in an unintentional way, comedic in the same way The Room is; there are also people who are able to ignore all of these issues if they do not take the scenario seriously either, going straight to the point merely to jack off.