Wednesday, April 14, 2021

My New Family by R0nnyA


Basically, just another Power Trip scenario in the vein of Harem, just with a lot less content. John is unhappy with his current family, Sandra didn't wake him up for school in time and Holly is distant, so when he gets the remote he changes his family to his own desire.

Depending on the choices he will make Holly his little servant sister and his mom, Sandra, either his girlfriend, sister, or close friend. People who appreciate morality on the side of the protagonist should probably skip this one, otherwise, you can check it out if you are into Mind Control and Incest, it will be either hot or plain creepy. Even then, is also pretty short, with only around 10 minutes of content.

This is the issue with most scenarios, all of them are not just incomplete, but also abandoned at their own very beginning, they create a setup and they just end, and I have tried to be as positive as possible about these stories in the past, I say, well, it is not a good story, but they offer good ideas, I try my best to think about someone who might fit the demographic the scenario is aiming for, but the truth is that checking stuff like this at the very end will be frustrating for a lot of readers, any kind of readers, even if you are the person who likes this kind of stories, you are just going to get teased and then left completely with your pants down! 

If you are going to write a scenario in the future, I would say work in giving either a complete story or at least... one hour of content? At least in that way, you will make sure that there will something for the people who decide to check your story. What are you saying? Publish something as short as this as a proof of concept? No, don't, we have enough of those already, and people end up abandoning those "proof of concepts" most of the time anyway! I am sure we can discuss the concept you want and the story with you in the forum or the Discord.

Now, there is just another little thing I can mention about this scenario, let's talk about the how-the-protagonist-gets-the-TF-device-trope!

So far in the community, we have seen:

A car dropped it by accident and I picked it up (Press Switch, Bodysuit 23)

Aliens gave it to me (Student Transfer Remote)

I found it in an old abandoned old place (Student Transfer Magic Book from Kat's house, PDA device from a library or so, I think)

There is also other stuff like magical events in Freaky Friday and stores that when you try to come back do not exist anymore. In this case, we have a variant, John gets the remote thanks to an old guy who offered him "a universal remote that does whatever he needed" but I feel that's the worst variation of the trope, why somebody would give a remote like that to a stranger? Just because they are the protagonist? Anyhow, for fetish and sexual-focused stories, it does the trick, but for more serious stories, I think is something you might want to take into account if you are going to write them.

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